My life story, anyone interested?

This is one of the few long stories I read through. It kept my attention. I cared what happened to you, the character. I wanted her to make right choices, have friends, and stop engaging in dangerous behaviors. I felt as the writing went on, it got better--it didn't sound so stagy. I think you should keep writing, exploring other aspects and in more detail. Remember that the reader lives through his senses. Thanks for sharing!